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В ответ на : aikuhoue от Getting A Loan в 11 января 2019 года в 10:47:26:

For the dialogue, Beverlee’s personality does not shine through. Though this is only the start of your book, you have to make all your characters seem real. Right now, Beverlee seems to only be present to give the main character (Natalie) something to talk about without going into a speech. Your idea, however, is a good one. Add plenty of details and keep writing.

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> For the dialogue, Beverlee’s personality does not shine through. Though this is only the start of your book, you have to make all your characters seem real. Right now, Beverlee seems to only be present to give the main character (Natalie) something to talk about without going into a speech. Your idea, however, is a good one. Add plenty of details and keep writing.

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